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Approved Submission U4GCM variable mecha.

Alex Hart

FM of NDC
🎖️ Game Master
Submission Type: Vehicle/mecha
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=faction:uso:u4gcm_minotaur

Faction: USO
FM Approved Yet? (Yes/No; Who, When) Yes.
Faction requires art? (Yes/No) Probably

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (Yes/No) no
Contains New art? (Yes/No) no
Previously Submitted? (Yes/No; explain reason if rejected) no

Notes: Its a transforming tank using technology from all over the place.
 
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Art is coming from someone, I think @DUMBOyBK is doing it. And I will pay. Could be wrong about the artist since Ame and Alex arranged it.
 
Art will probably be done before I finish with the review and there is concept art now to give this reviewer a good sense of what she's supposed to be imagining, so I'll start now.

"Onboard Systems Descriptions
NEEDS TEXT HERE
Sensors"

Onboard Systems Descriptions need more filled out. One or two lines is not the standard. Beef it up.

I wouldn't use the word "stuff" in an article.

So does it have to be laying down in order to transform into a tank?

"The Main gun..." (Don't need to capitalize this)

"...to it's light..." (its not it's)

Seems to be closer to T7 size-wise.

"Skimming: 120 KPH" (You're going to have to explain. Does that mean when in tank form?)

"There are four displays, two on the left and right that show views to either sides of the mecha, one main screen that shows the front view, and a small display above the main one that shows a rear view." (These likely change when it is in two different forms, right? Might want to mention that.)

"Weapons Systems
NEED TEXT HERE
Built in Autocannons"

Will do DR for weapons once we figure out tier.

Nice going making another neato mecha, duderino! Can't wait to see it in RP after we make some changes and hammer out the details.
 
If the artist doesn't get back to me in the next day, I'll go ahead and review this article even without the art.
 
I know it's been awhile, Ark3nd has left me hanging so let's go ahead with this submission! I'll look at it tonight and get back to you two tomorrow about it!

[EDIT] Just realized I already began this review and there was no response. My bad. Alex can you tell me what's going up with this?
 
Get the go-ahead from @Alex Hart but that's great by me. You probably want to see this in RP sooner rather than later!
 
Art will probably be done before I finish with the review and there is concept art now to give this reviewer a good sense of what she's supposed to be imagining, so I'll start now.

"Onboard Systems Descriptions
NEEDS TEXT HERE
Sensors"

Onboard Systems Descriptions need more filled out. One or two lines is not the standard. Beef it up.

I wouldn't use the word "stuff" in an article.

So does it have to be laying down in order to transform into a tank?

"The Main gun..." (Don't need to capitalize this)

"...to it's light..." (its not it's)

Seems to be closer to T7 size-wise.

"Skimming: 120 KPH" (You're going to have to explain. Does that mean when in tank form?)

"There are four displays, two on the left and right that show views to either sides of the mecha, one main screen that shows the front view, and a small display above the main one that shows a rear view." (These likely change when it is in two different forms, right? Might want to mention that.)

"Weapons Systems
NEED TEXT HERE
Built in Autocannons"

Will do DR for weapons once we figure out tier.

Nice going making another neato mecha, duderino! Can't wait to see it in RP after we make some changes and hammer out the details.
 
Fixed errors and doubled the size to make it Tier 8. Now I just need to come up with some text to put in those spots.
 
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