I'll take this one, haven't done a handheld weapon in a while.
This review is for: The Coherent Aether Rifle
The submitted article is/has…
[Y ] A very high level of overall quality
[Y ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[Y ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[Y ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[Y ] In the proper format/template
[Y ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[N ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[Y ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[Y ] No red and/or broken links
[Y ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[Y ] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[N ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[N ] Obtusely redundant
[N ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[Y ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
@Wes
[N ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[N ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[N ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[N ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[N ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[N ] Lacking Detail
[N ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[N/A ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[Y ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[N ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[Y ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
A large amount of the article seems focused unnecessarily on the firing/cooling time of the weapon, which make the article feel just... Messier than it should be. There shouldn't be several moderate-sized paragraphs and then various equations in order to explain the rifle's rate of cooling, when 1-2 moderate length paragraphs should suffice.
The weight seems a touch excessive for the M2 rifle (the smaller one). It weighs almost as much as Arbitrated, which seems really odd for a rifle that is two feet long (especially compared to the significantly longer M12, which only weighs slightly more).
You mostly followed the template, but I think you forgot to add information about firing underwater.
It is intended to be powered by an armor connected to it, but can you either say how much time its internal capacitor allows it to fire when disconnected or state there is no internal capacitor at all?
Status: Pending
Notes
The sentence "The top of the weapon has a mounting weapon for the standard-issue Ke-W1-1A 30x Multi-spectrum Variable Zoom AIES-linking scope, which has a boxy shape and a predominately blue color profile." It needs another pass-over in the grammar department, I don't think weapons have mounting weapons
Lastly, IDK if Yamland would have cyan-colored Aether, but that's really pretty minor and can be hashed-out with
@Wes easily in DMs or something.
Other than the things I've pointed out this looks pretty good!
I intend to finish this review by: Friday, November 10th.