Approved Submission [Business] Koga's Palace

[Ametheliana]

Submission URL

https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:corp:akemis_umbrella:kogas_palace

Submission Type: Business Subsidiary
Template Used: Business template
Submission WIP URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:corp:akemis_umbrella:kogas_palace
Submission Destination URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:akemis_umbrella:kogas_palace
Faction: Independent
FM Approved Yet? No
Faction requires art? No

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Contains New art? No
Previously Submitted? No

Notes:
This was @raz's idea from when we first adopted Akemi.

[EDIT] NAME CHANGE took out the "hut"

 

[Rizzo]

This review is for: Koga's Palace

The submitted article is/has…
[ ✔] A very high level of overall quality
[✔ ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[✔ ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[ ✔] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ ✔] In the proper format/template
[✔ ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[✔ ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[✔ ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[✔ ] No red and/or broken links
[✔ ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[✔ ] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[✔ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ✔] Obtusely redundant
[✔ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[✔ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[✔ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[✔ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[✔ ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[✔ ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ ✔] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ ✔] Lacking Detail
[✔ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[ ✔] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ ✔] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[✔ ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ ✔] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
** It looks great. Just another awesome restaurant.

Status: Approved.

 

[Wes]

FM Approved

 

[Rizzo]

In hindsight, maybe I should have let you FM approve this first. Sorry, @Wes. I'll work on that