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Approved Submission Gingas Bomber Update

Arbitrated

Arbitrated

The Smollest Smol
🦊 FM of Neshaten
Submission Type: Small Craft Update
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:stararmy:small_craft:ke-v7_ginga_bomber
Old URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=stararmy:small_craft:ke-v7_ginga_bomber
Faction: Yamatai/Star Army
FM Approved Yet? No, @Wes must approve this
Faction requires art? It has art from the old version.

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Nope
Contains New art? Nada
Previously Submitted? Iiii.... Don't think so?

Notes: Honestly, the old page was barely a stub.
 
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I’m in class and can’t pull up my checklist right now...so this is all cursory stuff.
  • Typo in Weapon Systems: “A large munitions bay in the senter of the craft...”
  • That’s all so far.
 
Alright, now time for the proper review LOL

This review is for: Ginga Bomber Update

The submitted article is/has…
[ YES ] A very high level of overall quality
[ YES ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ YES ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[ YES ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
  • The Ginga Bomber is Yamatai's only bomber and also a stub of an article. Very out of date.
[ YES ] In the proper format/template
  • The Ginga Bomber qualifies as a vehicle, therefore it falls under the vehicle template.
[ YES ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[ YES ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
  • Clarity could perhaps be increased with explicitly saying "The Ginga can hold 24 bombs"
[ YES ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ YES ] No red and/or broken links
[ YES ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ YES ] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[ NO ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
  • Unless you consider the original Ginga overpowered.
[ NO ] Obtusely redundant
[ NO ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ NO ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
  • FM Approved!
[ NO ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
  • The topic block is a direct copy-paste.
[ NO ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ NO ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ NO ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ NO ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ NO ] Lacking Detail
[ NO ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[ YES ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ YES ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ YES ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
  • Allowed to be the past, since this is an update.
[ YES ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
No serious issues. Other than FM approval.

Status: Approved.

Notes
tadaaaa

I have finished this review on: 9/26/2017
 
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Tbh you'd probably be better off using the starship template since this is large enough to have an interior deck.

Probably akin to the B-36 Peacemaker or B-52 Stratofortress.
 
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