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[Hidden Sun Clan] Kujop'a Rotyka (Repulsion Cannon)

Reminds me of the repulsors for the dreadnought from Homeworld Cataclysm. Nonetheless, this doesn't make this a bad submission at all, and it looks great to me. I recommend it for approval.
 
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The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ] Obtusely redundant
[ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ ] Lacking Detail
[ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
The way this is worded, it sounds like it will always deflect projectiles that are more than 30 degrees off which to me is essentally metagaming saying that it will always work in this way as you are essentally saying what will happen to someone else's attack.

However to be 30 degrees off and still be able to hit the target, warenting this device's deflection, you'd have to be within a few hundred meters of the ship so that feature is bearly usable.

I don't think you really need to say it can deflect targets, as that should be implied by anyone with any understanding of physics. The best solution would be to merely say it can do this instead of it will do this.

Grammer nitpick aside, This is good enough for approval.

Status: Approved

Notes
3ADR per burst at 5 bursts per 10 seconds is a bit much especally considering that rapid fire weapons like this are supposed to be treated as a set amount of DR over time (DPS), but it isn't a deal killer as it would still only be 2-3ish SDR. Again this is something I consider right on the boarder of being approvable.

Also, you should really try to avoid saying anti-gravo-photons as that is just pointless technobabble. It would be best just to say anti-gravity and not explain exactly what causes the anti-gravity.

I intend to finish this review by: Now ]
 
Changed the wording to reflect the damage is per a ten second interval.

And clarified how the deflection works.

At more than 30 degrees projectiles without guidance and propulsion will be deflected away from the ship. Otherwise the pulses slam into the target causing damage.
 
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