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Approved Submission Invictus Class Foldship

Bullroarer

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Ok, so I took a look at this and the submission is very solid. That's my crappy art in there, and some much better art is on the way from Gunsight.

The only issue I can see is that it has some older freespacer tech in it that the NTSE might want to make a ruling on. I know Alex tried to use some of this stuff earlier and I think the consensus was that we're trying to phase out the older spacer tech like the probability manipulation stuff.

Also, this might not be the place for this, but Bullroarer's group is still pretty independent even though its technically under USO at this point. I guess USO FMs still need to approve stuff since S6 is mentioned in here but we should probably get Bullroarer some ability to give FM approval to his own stuff?
 
Good submission! Thank you for submitting!

This is a tier 13 ship, not 14. It fits within tier 13 comfortably and barely fits 14 as far as length goes.

This is not a complete sentence:
Featuring a double stack of batteries allowing for a double jump without recharge, makes the Invictus an ideal civilian or military drop ship hauler as well as large cargo transport, sporting nine hard points for FTL travel.

Everything past "inside the ship" has some tech we should ask @Primitive Polygon about.
 
Thanks for the heads up, Ame.

Bleh, sorry Bullroarer, this kind of turned into a long post, but it seems like you have a lot of disjointed copypasta going on here?..

History; Who actually did the overhaul when they brought this thing back to life? There are a few mentions of Freespacers elsewhere, but in design terms, it's anything but. Normal spacers have low standards and pirate spacers are likely even worse, which makes the apparently prim and proper nature of this thing a little confusing...

Passengers section; It mentions a Destiny AI suite, but then talks about a Freespacer SI in a few other places. What's up with that? It's probably also worth mentioning that the original baba yaga deal expressly forbade them from using such SIs, but this is a civillian ship and... Yeah, Section 6 really needs to make a proper deal with the Wire Guided/Hammerhead. They are basically right on your doorstep.

Junkers; Zero problem with you using them. In fact, you could probably use Liquid Ally if you asked the WG, too.

Workshop; Not really a problem, but having a Grinder does imply some weirdness... Like, those things are used to grind up Freespacer bodies into recyclable material! If this isn't a spacer ship, what's going on with that?

Bridge; Realise this is probably just a problem of word use, but yeah, you should probably specify that it can control 'NU Automata' specifically... Automata are a huge subject with various levels of intelligence and free will.

Escape Pods; Bleh. Copied. Totally not okay with modern Spacer standards... Well, not unless they really are Wired Rovers level psycho pirates. Keep in mind that the State Issue Ayame was designed and operated during a period of impending genocide by the Yamatai... Yeah, the Free State doesn't really exist anymore, and neither does this mentality. IRL 10 year old articles for the win.

MHD Dynamos; Guessing the mention of the 'Last Laugh' system here is only because of copypasta from the State Issue Ayame...

The Queen Suite; A third ship AI listed?...
 
"...and sensor cloaking at the cost of being able to maintain the ship's shield while active..."
Did you mean not able to maintain the ship's shields?

"...evanescent wave tunneling phenomenal..."
Did you mean phenomena?

"Propulsion
TEXT/PROSE BELONGS HERE
FTL Drive"
"Vehicle Complement
TEXT/PROSE BELONGS HERE
Starbryte Shuttle (6)"
Please put text or prose after main headers and before sub-headers.

Good job working things out!!!
 
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