Approved Submission [Species] Dakalar

[BloodyScarlet]

Submission URL

https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:species:dakalar

Submission Type: Species submission
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:species:dakalar

Faction: Suu
FM Approved Yet? (Yes/No; Who, When) New faction so yes I guess
Faction requires art? (Yes/No) yes

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (Yes/No) yes
Contains New art? (Yes/No) no
Previously Submitted? (Yes/No; explain reason if rejected) yes, because there was still work to do and I had no time at that point to work on it.

Notes: Sorry there is no art, I have no money for that stuff yet but soon will have.

 

[BloodyScarlet]

Will sort this out tomorrow, I will add more to the Biotech as I have a lot of ideas for this.

Sorry about the Wruuph parts, but I will make sure.

 

[BloodyScarlet]

I think that is it.

 

[Ametheliana]

This review is for: Wruuph, Dakalar, Alixxion

The submitted article is/has…
[✓] A very high level of overall quality
[✓] A general topic sentence under the title header
[Coming Soon] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[✓] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[✓] In the proper format/template
[✓] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[✓] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[✓] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[✓] No red and/or broken links
[✓] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[✓] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[✓] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[✓] Obtusely redundant
[✓] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[✓] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[✓] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[✓] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[✓] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[✓] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[✓] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[✓] Lacking Detail
[✓] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[n/a] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[n/a] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[n/a] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[n/a] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.

Approved