Approved Submission [uso] S6-HU-1A Plasma space heater

[Jack Pine]

Submission Type: Plasma space heater
Template Used: none
Submission WIP URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:faction:uso:section6:s6-hu-1a
Submission Destination URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=faction:uso:section6:s6-hu-1a

Faction:
FM Approved Yet? (Yes; me: Jack Pine on 3/30/2018 at 5:29am)
Faction requires art? (No)

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (No)
Contains New art? (Yes/)
Previously Submitted? (No)

Notes: So i figured I'd try my hand at some civilian products

 

[Arbitrated]

I'll take this one too

 

[Arbitrated]

This review is for: The Plasma Space Heater

The submitted article is/has…
[EH] A very high level of overall quality
[Y] A general topic sentence under the title header
[Y] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[Y] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[N/A] In the proper format/template
[N] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[Y] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[Y] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[Y] No red and/or broken links
[Y] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[Y] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[N] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[N] Obtusely redundant
[N] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[N] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[N] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[N] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[N] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[N] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[N] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[N] Lacking Detail
[N] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[N/A] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[N/A] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[Y] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[Y] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Seems overall alright. The main issue present is that the page has a multitude of grammatical errors.

Status: Not Approved , Pending , or Approved.

Notes
N/A

I intend to finish this review by: 4/10/2018

 

[Jack Pine]

Anything specific?

 

[Arbitrated]

Aside from the grammar issues, not particularly.

 

[Jack Pine]

I went through and fixed what I could find and also added dimensions info to the statistics section.

 

[Arbitrated]

Seems that everything's in order, I APPROVE this article.