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Approved Character [Zenjinkaze] Fuyakawa Tenshi

Mostly good, just need to get a few things tidied up or clarified.

Make sure you use the proper Skill Areas for all your Skills. All the descriptions are fine, just give them the standard names. I'll go ahead and say that listing your Martial Art as a skill instead of just putting it under Fighting is fine, if you want, since it's a big part of this plot.

If you want to make up your own Martial Art, can we get a bit more info on it? Is it only popular on Yamatai, maybe in a specific region? Is another Sora-Mai sub-style? Or sub-sub-style? Does it focus on punches, elbows, knees, kicks, etc.? How did she run into it, and why would she pick it over SACQC or some other, more traditional SAoY style?

Was she attending Officer School or another sort of training school? Maybe @Ametheliana can help out with this one.

Also maybe adjust the Connections section to clarify that she was never particularly close to anyone, or didn't make friends easily, instead of just not meeting anyone.

I went ahead and fixed your starting money. And copied Ryu's table in there (and on Keiko's page too).

Just post here again when that's all fixed, or feel free to ask if something I said didn't make sense. Thanks!
 
Hey, it's been a while. Were you able to update the character with Reynolds's suggestions?
 
Yes, but with Reynold's departure, the character is not a priority anymore. I was planning on reworking her for Kaiyo, but that wouldn't be in the immediate future. But thanks for the heads up regardless, do I need to get what I have to a WIP namespace or a file on my PC?
 
I'll move the page to WIP for you.

There's no rush. Take whatever time you need to update her.

Thanks for the update!
 
i'd also like to point out reynolds isn't completely gone and I talk with them in DM's here and there, obviously your choice what you do with the character but thought I'd let you know that if you're prepared to wait the plot may start up later
 
Due to ^ this, I'm re-instating the character @Wes

@Reynolds https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:character:fuyakawa_tenshi This is the new link after the page was moved to the WIP namespace, if you want to give it another gander. Edited the skills to be more conform to the standard, made sure to write a bit more on the fighting skill, but holding it vague since it's less of a properly developed style in my mind and more of a "let's see how this develops" kind of thing. I'll add to it if I get more into the fighting style itself.

Updated history and connections as well per request- Thank you for fixing the starting money and adding the table ^^

Hope this is good :)
 
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