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Approved Submission Application of Occupation Template - Star Army Combat Vehicle Operator

RaWolfe

RaWolfe

Retired Staff
Submission URL
https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=stararmy:occupations:combat_vehicle_operator
Submission Faction(s)
  1. Yamatai (except Elysia)
Submission Terms
  1. I agree
Updated it as much as I potentially could with redirection for additional information of known Vehicle within Star Army. I twisted and turned my brain around to get some roles to this occupation and added three that made the most sense. If they are wrong or I missed one, I gladly stand open to add or rectify!
 
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The way you've got the uniform colors and opening artwork isn't consistent with the other articles I've been looking at this morning - here's some examples:

https://stararmy.com/roleplay-forum/posts/416838/
https://stararmy.com/roleplay-forum/posts/416835/

Feels a little weird to put hover operation under Mecha Operator. Hover might fit in better with the 'Military Driver' specialization? I'll leave it to you and a Yam FM (@Wes ) to decide what fits best.

Some of the listed skills aren't part of the main skills list. It might be good to put those as sub-bullets under one of the existing skills so that players aren't confused.

I don't see any other major issues, but will let the FMs have the final word there.

Thanks Ra! :D
 
Thank you for the review @Whisper and the artwork is kinda what I have, might tweak it to fit better.

Thought most of the skills are skills that I got from military tank operation manuals. Feel free to suggest something else as I had nothing at the beginning ;)
 
The art is fine. It's the layout - you've used a table with a gray box next to it, the other pages use art and a short sentence or two following it. It should be consistent.

As for the skills - take a look at the 'master list' ( https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=guide:skills ) and draw some inspiration from the SAoY common skills ( https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=stararmy:skills:common ). All I'd suggest is taking the skills you have that aren't from the master list and putting them under the appropriate 'master' skill like what you see in the common skills page. The actual skills that you identified make perfect sense in the context of one of the skill categories.
 
It looks like this occupation was not 'officialized' in the Star Army until YE 39. The history of the occupations page shows I added the occupation and MOS code in 2017.

That said, the Star Army has used tanks since it was made and had Nekovalkyrja operating tanks in Operation Bloody Shield before we had any power armor available at all, which should be mentioned in the history.
 
Alrighty, thanks for the feedback thus far!

I updated the following
  • Fixed the image layout
  • Added structure to skills
  • Added Operation Bloody Shield to justify tanks being part of Star Army
  • Made reference to CVO being introduced in YE 39
 
[ ✅ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ✅ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
[ ✅ ] 3. The article follows our wiki-style guidelines, including No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ✅ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ✅ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
[ ✅ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ ✅ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and credited in the OOC section
[ ✅ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ✅ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ✅ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Seeing as two Yamatai FMs have been involved I'll assume it's got your approval at this point. :) Approved!
 
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