I think this looks good...*waits for Nep GMs to give opinions*
Technical stuff:
First thing noticed was the "She receives a weekly salary of -salary- per week" at the bottom, probably left over from the automated formatting thing(?)
Second thing noticed was the main header (because it became the title of the blue bar at the top of the Firefox window and was very long). Most likely you can get shorten that to either "Deacon" or "Burning Autumn Wind" and then add an "Aliases" section (or just replace "Bra Size" with "Aliases") in the information grid below it. In the "Aliases" section, you could write something like:
Given Name: Burning Autumn Wind
Alias: Known as "Deacon" on Nepleslia
Likewise, change the info grid header, I think it's supposed to read "General Information" with the name being the first box in the grid.
(See
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:tweak for examples of information grid formatting.)
The more nitpicky details were things like the Parents/Creator section: You can probably just move that info to a mention in the History section and write "parents unknown/deceased" in the Parents/Creator box (this would cause the grid to shrink down to a smaller size, too), and there was a missing comma (or "and") between Brother Night Watches Over and Sister Winter's Mist. Also, a missing end-parenthesis after "maces" and an unnecessary capital "b" on "blunt weapons" in the Weapons section.
You can probably remove the height-weight and measurements info from either "General Information" or "Physical Characteristics", otherwise it's repetition. That's just a streamlining issue, not required though (since it was put there by the auto-formatter in the first place).
Query, to either AoK or a Nepleslian GM: Would an anthro hyena be able to fit (comfortably or uncomfortably) into a power armor?