Approved Submission [Galactic Horizon] 7.7mm Frontiersman Repeating Rifle + Ammo + Diacry Sealant Agent

[SirSkully]

Submission URL

https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:galactic_horizon:gh-w2-2b_7.7mm_frontiersman_repeating_rifle

List Any Unapproved Sub-Articles

7.7x60mm Shotshell WIP: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:corp:galactic_horizon:7.7x60mm_shotshell
7.7x60mm Shotshell URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:galactic_horizon:7.7x60mm_shotshell

7.7x60mm WIP: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:corp:galactic_horizon:7.7x60mm
7.7x60mm URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:galactic_horizon:7.7x60mm

Diacry WIP: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:corp:galactic_horizon:diacry
Diacry URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:galactic_horizon:diacry

Submission Faction(s)

1. Neshaten

Submission Terms

1. I agree

Nothing too special but knowing me I've probably messed the article up somehow, anywho, rifle with ammo and something that can make wooden stocks on weapons as good as their synthetic counterparts.

 

[SirSkully]

Turns out I needed to fix up a few things regarding this weapon's range that I happened to overlook, that has now been all fixed up though.

 

[Andrew]

Good Evening @SirSkully

I have begun a review of your submission. I will post the checklist in the next 24-48 hours so I can review your submission in more detail.

 

[SirSkully]

Oh lol, uh, cool~

Cheers for that

 

[Andrew]

Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...

[ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
[ ] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
[ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
[ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Here are some fixes this article still needs:

I don't see any issues with this submission, except for the excessive range on the one heavy ammunition:

Galactic Horizon 7.7x60mm

• Effective Range: 3,600meters/3937yards

I would like to see this reduced to a more reasonable effective range. My suggestion would be:

Effective Range: 2,500meters
Maximum Range: 3,000 meters with reduced accuracy.


Thank you,

 

[SirSkully]

Done, also filled in a damage rating section on the rifle's article that I somehow missed ^^;

 

[Andrew]

I was actually just about to post an update asking for that damage rating. Anyway....good to go:

Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...

[ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
[ ] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
[ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
[ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.


Submission is approved.