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[Geshrinari] - Henkei-Class

Most everything looks good, but there are some issues:

- The red/green lights appear to be reversed from normal standards. (Remember: "If red's right you're wrong" -- if you see red on the right you are looking at the front of a ship coming towards you and you are in danger)

- The Type 30 escape pod has restricted ST tech, not something for public distribution

- "Features" section under mining module is blank https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ge ... e-y1-m3103

- Cargo Module doesn't have dimensions or the amount of standard containers that fit in it. https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ge ... e-y1-m3100 (I know it's on this page but it should be on the module page too.
 
Ok, All images have been corrected that had the navigation lamps wrong.

Escape Pod reference updated to reflect a Ge version with capabilites similar to Type 29 Pods.

Features section updated on Prospector variant.

Dimensions of storage area added to Ge-Y1-M3100 - Cargo Module
 
This review is for: Henkei-class Starship

The submitted article is/has…
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[X] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[X] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[X] In the proper format/template
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[X] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X]Lacking Detail

The article has…
[X] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[X] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[X] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[X] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Very high end. I expect it to gain a big market share.

Status: Approved.

(CIVILIAN SHIP)
(REVIEW FINISHED)
 
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