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Approved Submission [NDC] Multiculturalism effects on the Food and Holidays.

Charaa

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https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=faction:ndc:culture:multiculturalism_in_the_ndc
Submission Faction(s)
  1. NDC
Submission Terms
  1. I agree
Early on, I’d created this page because I was worried about the food situation in the NDC. They only had one food item at the time, and even that appeared limited. I had seen Whisper and Kore talking about the cuisine, and I know Rawolfe is also working on something that this page will be included on. I should mention that there were two multiculturalism pages, one for food and one for the Holidays. I have since merged these two, mostly to save time and pages. Also, Jack Pine and Whisper both know and had seen this page.
 
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Faction Management needs to stamp. The official review will follow that.
 
It's a little odd how all the images are of sushi, the variety of food images don't really seem to follow the multi-culturalism the article is about. Maybe we could switch some of them up?
 
I didnt want to have them stack in one place and i didnt see many articles with food art. If you do find something let me know!
 
I know a bunch of free stock image sites, give me a wishlist and I can probably come up with some stuff.
 
Thank to Hyralt, i have added the pizza to the page, and Wes, I’ll probably need
burger
fries
meat, so steak or something like that
oh rice
I got pizza thanks to Hyralt, and maybe pies of some kind.
 
You got a lot more picture diversity which is good.

  1. The article has a lot of readability issues and grammar problems. For example, the Yamatai section is very awkward... but really this extends through the entire article.
  2. I think the holiday sections could be rewritten to integrate the links into the paragraphs instead of having them as bullet points.
  3. I think it would be nice to see more than just the impact of food and holidays, maybe something about fashion, mannerisms, and languages too? (There was a great thread that came up recently on the forum about the fashion of each faction)
 
I wanted to make a quick update that the top three issues were corrected. The grammar issue i truly hope is corrected.
 
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Hi Charaa,

I hate to send you back on this again, but there are still a lot of readability issues and grammar problems in this submission. I'd be happy to help you out when I get some free time in the next day or so.

Thanks,
 
Is this ready for review now @Charaa ?
 
So I used the grammar check program, and my fingers are crossed. I seriously hope grammar-wise, and readability-wise everything is good. The level of seriously hope is extremely high it's not even funny heh.
 
[ ✅ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ✅ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and the article template. Is all the information for struct present?
[ ✅ ] 3. The article follows our wiki-style guidelines, including No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ✅ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ✅ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
[ ✅ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
[ ✅ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and credited in the OOC section.
[ ✅ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ✅ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ✅ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Approved
 
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