K.
This item has been in the submissions forum for
4 hours. As nobody has taken claim over it, So I shall.
Lets start with the
Checklist.
Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...
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] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
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] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
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] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
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] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
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] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
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] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
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] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
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] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
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] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
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] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.
Here's some fixes this article still needs:
1. SARP uses
American English as compared to
commonwealth English. Instances of
Armour and
Armoured should be changed to their Americanized counterparts of
Armor and
Armored.
2. The description is rather bare. When i read it-it makes me feel like its a
Semi-Truck that goes above 100/mph. It also lists a gunner and weapons options but doesnt describe a cupola or hatch or turret or anything until the
Weapons systems section. Picture the
Appearance section as what information you would give an artists if they where to re-create it. You wouldn't want them to make it to scale and then go *
Well you missed the weapon mounts*.
These fixes required are minor at best and will not halt the progression of your article. Please attend to these and @ me here when they have been addressed. If you do not receive a response from me by
8/11/19 feel free to reach out to me in the discord (
Sister Disco (Char)#0655), but not before then.