Hi Spartan,
Well lets get a first review on your character.
Two typos in the Build and Skin section
curveous should be curvaceous
feminity should be femininity
Pre-RP
What can I say, there is nothing there, need to know a bit about her, what made her decide that she wants to you have her listed as a Yamataian, and that she is 19. What was she before she became a Yamataian? Why did she choose to become one, and what has she been doing for 19 years.
Onto Skills
Communications:
Angela is fully fluent in five languages, including English and Japanese.
First there is no English and Japanese, in the SARP the equivalent are Nepleslian and Yamataian. And what are the other three languages? You have to list them.
Fighting:
three times the gravity of Earth.
There is no Earth in the SARP.[/color] So rephrase to three G's.
Tech Ops:
As a SAINT warrant officer , the ability to operate technology quickly is a vital skill. She is an expert at utilising the ship;s computer for
She is not a warrant office, obviously left over from your first draft.
ship;s should be ship's
Overall its a very good try, please address the items above and then update this forum to continue the review process.
This character is still pending approval.