N'More Attack Ship

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Submission Type: Military Ship
Template Used: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=templates:starship
Submission WIP URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:faction:l_kor:ships:n_more
Submission Destination URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=faction:l_kor:ships:n_more

Faction: L'Kor
FM Approved Yet? No
Faction requires art? No

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Yes
Contains New art? No
Previously Submitted? Yes- Submitted as one of the ships on this page.

Notes: First draft. As this seems to be the primary ship of the L'Kor fleet, I invite any who wish to collaborate on this project.
 
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I went ahead and edited the OP.

I have a few problems with the submission as the L'Kor FM, but I did give you permission to start this. I haven't seen it since it was barebones and there are some things inconsistent with how they've been portrayed in RP now that it's complete. For that reason it does not have my approval yet at this time as the L'Kor person.

I'm going to slap a pending on this, ask that you and I work on this some more over discord or in this thread, up to you.

As the L'Kor person I also need to ask a different reviewer to take this article than me. @CadetNewb or @Fred, maybe?
 
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The article seems pretty sparse and incomplete to me. I don't find I have much to evaluate it on seeing I'm not the person with the most know-how on the L'kor at that.

To me, this needs more time in the cooker, along with a healthy back and forth with the L'Kor's creator.
 
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i expected a collaborative effort, especially as the Kuvexian/L'Kor plot encompass a large majority of the site and Many/Most of the required tech and subsystems haven't been completed as well. It was intended as a bare bones start.
 

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Would you like this thread moved to setting discussion until we're ready to put it here?
 

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I added FIXME to everything that needs text on the article. Go check it out. A bullet list from me is incoming in this thread about what can be changed.
 

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From my experience, this forum is only supposed to work on ships that are already finished and ready to go through the approval process. Moving it to the setting discussion section would be best.
 

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It is not a fleet escort and should not have something like a deck plan other than a cockpit for two, though only one operator is required for operation. Basically this is a huge craft not meant for many people at all and in this sub it doesn't really reflect that, though the RP does. I would recommend making that change to a smaller crew capacity and then we'll move from there.

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Are those ships on the L'Kor's ship page all the L'Kor have or just the only ones your plot encountered?
 

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Are those ships on the L'Kor's ship page all the L'Kor have or just the only ones your plot encountered?
No, they are the ships that I felt were most useful to RP. Our RP has encountered all of them, though.
 

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then to save time and energy, shall i start a new framework and leave this one, or re-purpose this existing design with a new name to preserve the current L'kor approved documents?
 

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Whichever is easier.

I would expect you to just change the name and take the artwork off and use the content you've already made, though.