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Approved Submission [SAoY] Type 41 Turbo Aether Plasma Shotgun + Ammo

SirSkully

SirSkully

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Submission URL
https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=stararmy:weapons:ke-m4-w4002_type_41_turbo_aether_plasma_shotgun
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WIP Ammunition: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:stararmy:ammunition:ke-m4-w4002_heat_discarding_mediums
Ammunition URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=stararmy:ammunition:ke-m4-w4002_heat_discarding_mediums
Submission Faction(s)
  1. Yamatai (except Elysia)
Submission Terms
  1. I agree
So Seeing as the accelerated charged plasma scatter gun type 30 is no longer in production and falls behind a bit in performance I figured I would update it, which is something I had intended to do back when the YSS Hana was a thing but that died and killed my mood for the project a bit until recently when I came up with my own SAoY plot and decided we needed some more weapons that could be used by both PA troops and non-PA troops c:

I also plan to get art after this has been approved, to paint a better image of how it works.
 
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I'd really like to see art for this. It looks good overall but I see some things that will come in the review - there's big paragraphs shoved into bullets and some sections of the page that don't have regular text in them (only lists, etc). American English in preferred on the wiki (e.g. armor instead of armour) so we should check for that. Also, the weapon seems pretty expensive and it should probably say something about how aether weapons are legally restricted from leaving Yamatai.
 
I did say I will be getting art of this if it is approved.

Is it bad to have a lot of information after bullet points? The information is all relevant to the sections it is under and I was simply sticking to the way things are laid out in the weapons template. The weapon is 5,000ks cheaper than the LASR but I can alter that if needs be and I added more info about it being a restricted weapon.

Finally are there many things that need to be Americanised in the article? because obviously I use British English, what with me being an Australian and all that ^^;
 
Speaking on spellings:
colours -> colors
centimetre -> centimeter
armour -> armor

Also foregrip is coming up as a problem, but tbh some places on the net use it as one word. Maybe consider hyphenating it as “fore-grip”?
 
Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...
[ ✔ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ✔ 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
[ ✔ 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ✔ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ✔ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate
[ ✔ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ ✔ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
[ ✔ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ✔ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ✔ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Here's some fixes this article still needs:

1. I don't know if the price is quite right yet, as it seems like it'd be a fairly expensive weapon. Let's try to figure out a good price for this, or if it would have one at all.
 
Since the art hasn't been made yet and this is a Star Army weapon, I'm asking: Please make the gun the right color.

Acceptable colors for Star Army weapons:
  • Star Army Gunmetal (preferred for small arms)
  • Star Army Hull Paint (preferred for mecha and power armor weapons)
  • Dark gray/Matte Black (detail/secondary color)
  • RIKUPAT (camo version if applicable)
 
Yeah I planned on it being mostly the light blue with a few grey/black highlights near the handle and maybe the pump mechanism.
 
Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...
[ ✔ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ✔ 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
[ ✔ 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ✔ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ✔ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate
[ ✔ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ ✔ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
[ ✔ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ✔ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ✔ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.


APPROVED
 
Thanks again for submitting an article to the wiki! Time for some final steps for the reviewer...
[ ✔ ] 1. State clearly that the article is approved in the submission thread
[ ✔ ] 2. Move the wiki article to its permanent (destination) location on the wiki
[ ✔ ] 3. Move the submission thread to the Approved Submissions subforum or get a moderator to
[ ✔ ] 4. Edit the article to add a link to the approval thread in the OOC Notes section
[ ✔ ] 5. Link other articles to the approved article as appropriate (equipment lists, etc.)
 
I was reviewing this weapon for its 5-year (YE 46) review and I noticed that the artwork this submission was supposed to get never happened. I'm thinking it should be phased out of use since it doesn't meet Yamatai's equipment standards because of the lack of art. I don't really have much time or money to make the art myself or commission it, and Skully probably doesn't either. I guess as a solution we could try to AI art a placeholder for it? Let me know if that is okay.
 
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