I'll start from the top and work down the page
in the info box at the top, could you please link the other items, its not a super serious rule but wes likes everything being linked on the wiki,
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:micalio_di_aldio here's my engineer as an example and also has the links for you
in physical description, could you please list one of the 5 senses to be weakened other than hearing
personality looks fine
history, just at the end of the first line could you mention that as well as the semi unusual pairing of her parents, her being born a Daur was a rare occurance, a brief description for this is that the Daur trait is a recessive trait
connections, there's no issue with having younger or older siblings, but another small known thing with nesh is they are often born in litters, that being said, you're fine to leave it as is if you want as it's not impossible, especially given her already rare existence
skills learned, there's no issue with having them know starship operations, however it will need a better reason im afraid, but given you've stated on the page they want to command a ship you can simply explain them having the basic knowledge of starship ops as they have started trainig to become an officer/shipmaster while currently serving as an engineer, if you have any other ideas feel free to ping me on discord
and that's what I can see, if there's any questions or you want more info on anything I've mentioned here, discord is the easiest way to get me however its 11:52 as i write this so wont be up too much longer, my dms get checked regularly