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Approved Submission The Mining Guild's Magpie
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Andrew
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@Jack Pine for NDC FM Approval.
Andrew
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Hi! Just seen the FM approval so let's get started!
Some thoughts (Not dependant on approval)
- I see a lot of words in the article that can be wified, same as the Stork. Take some time and comb through. The more an article is integrated the better.
- Some DOGA art would be nice for this ship. (I volunteer my services if you want)
- Some issues with grammar, the tense and perspective changes a few times in the article just take a browse through most of them are easy fixes.
Some thoughts (Not dependant on approval)
- Now that you've started to make a few ships for your Mining Guild you might want to consider making some standard systems and interiors beyond what you already have. I find this helps simplify the ship making process.
- It would be cool to see some unique ship features/compartments pop up. A Mining Guild is something that can have a lot of flavors in a setting.
Thank you so much for picking my submission for review 
I went in and wikified everything that needed to be, and I tried to look carefully through and dealt with the grammar issues you mentioned specifically the tenses I hope its better now.
I’d love some art actually I’ve seen what you can do and it looks awesome
I did create a Mineral scanner and probes, but I was thinking since the Magpie is more for transporting rather than investigation I wasn’t sure if I should add it. Though I will think about what I could make, but I am open to suggestions.
I went in and wikified everything that needed to be, and I tried to look carefully through and dealt with the grammar issues you mentioned specifically the tenses I hope its better now.
I’d love some art actually I’ve seen what you can do and it looks awesome
I did create a Mineral scanner and probes, but I was thinking since the Magpie is more for transporting rather than investigation I wasn’t sure if I should add it. Though I will think about what I could make, but I am open to suggestions.
Andrew
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FM of Tsenlan
🌸 FM of Yamatai
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Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...
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] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
[ ] 3. The article follows our wiki-style guidelines, including No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
[ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
[ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
[ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
[ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.
Approved. Feel free to reach out to me after this weekend to arrange some DOGA Art.
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] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores[
] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template[
] 3. The article follows our wiki-style guidelines, including No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.[
] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar[
] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken[
] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels[
] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)[
] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.[
] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.[
] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.Approved. Feel free to reach out to me after this weekend to arrange some DOGA Art.
