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Approved Submission [Yamatai] Izanagi-Class Dreadnought

Immortal Cyan

The Cyan Neko
Submission Type: Starships and vehicles
Template Used: Starship Template
Submission WIP URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:stararmy:starships:izanagi-class_dreadnought
Submission Destination URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=stararmy:starships:izanagi-class_dreadnought

Faction: Yamatai
FM Approved Yet? (Yes/No; Who, When) No, @Wes
Faction requires art? (Yes/No) Yes

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (Yes/No) Yes, Ke-B5-W3900 Amenonuhoko-Class Main Weapon Array, Type 39 Anti-Fortress Turret, Type 39 Superheavy Anti-Starship Turret, Type 39 Heavy Anti-Starship Turret, Type 39 Anti-Starship Turret, Type 39 Anti-Armor Turret, Type 39 250mm Heavy Anti-Mecha Missile Rack, Type 39 500mm Vertical Launcher Bay, Type 39 Defensive Countermeasure Launcher, and, Ke-O1-1B Soul Savior Pod.
Contains New art? (Yes/No) Yes
Previously Submitted? (Yes/No; explain reason if rejected) No

Notes: Phew! That was fun!

Thanks to @Khasidel and @Rizzo for letting me adopt this beautiful starship! A second thanks to Khasidel for contributing most of "meat" of the submission.

Thanks to @HAMnJAM for writing the article on the Type 39 Defensive Countermeasures.

Thanks to @Toshiro for his ample technical advice and constructive criticism!

Thanks to whichever NTSE mod decides to review this monster of a ship! The work you do on SARP is much appreciated!
 

Immortal Cyan

The Cyan Neko
Nice try. :)

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Can there really be 600 000 Mindy IVs in there? I thought the Mindy IV was still kind of uncommon.
As for the quanity of Mindy IVs, it may just be my perception. I came to the site when the Mindy IV was replacing the old model, so I'm under the impression that the Mindy IV is the primary SAoY power armor.

Also, no Izanagi-class dreadnoughts have been built yet, so, I imagine that the first one would receive a fresh and brand-new inventory.
 
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Rizzo

Well-Known Member
It has also been under construction since the 2nd Mish war IIRC. The M2-2D may be the most common reserve on board the ship while the space Daisy might be used for interior defense. A little diversity might go a long way strategically. Of course I seriously doubt there will be any need for reserve PA on a ship like this.
 

Ametheliana

Sensei
Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
FM of Nepleslia
FM of the Iromakuanhe
Game Master
@Wes is this something you do not want in the setting or Yamatai or is it FM approved?
 

Ethereal

Well-Known Member
Oh my god I didn't realise there were 600,000 Mindies in there. That's the equivalent of 30 Rikugun Legions :0

I'd also like to say if this got through it'd be a potentially great boon to myself and @paladinrpg's plots.

It would also be a great trial run for the class given total planetary capture is too large for a single conventional battleship (Sharie) to undertake but obviously it doesn't make sense to dispatch a large fleet to field enough infantry for a prolonged assault campaign when the space element is unknown.

Otherwise you'd be tying up a force like the 1XF much like Ame is doing but for a extended time where they could be better used and dispersed. Roll it all into one ship and have ten escorts plus a few landing craft and everything's sorted, there's no need to use several battleships when you can use one.

In addition, we're going to be coming up across all manner of tech old and new, plus some NMX salvage, which this ship was designed for. It'd definitely put the class through its paces as a trial before more were rolled out through a huge range of hostile tech.
 
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Arbitrated

The Smollest Smol
FM of Elysia
I think I'll take the non-FM review for this. Alternatively, @Wes may want to review this himself on account of this being such a... Potent element of the setting.
 

Ametheliana

Sensei
Staff Member
Submissions Reviewer
FM of Nepleslia
FM of the Iromakuanhe
Game Master
This review is for: Izanagi Class Dreadnought with URL https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:stararmy:starships:izanagi-class_dreadnought

The submitted article is/has…
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] A very high level of overall quality
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ X ] In the proper format/template
[ X ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] No red and/or broken links
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Obtusely redundant
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Lacking Detail
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ ▰˘◡˘▰] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.

You need text after major headers/ before images/bullets/charts/etc. You do this in History and Background and Appearance and in these two instances:
NOTES:
Vehicle Complement
TEXT
Power Armor

Ship Systems
TEXT
Armored Hull and Hull Integrated Systems


It is hangar not hanger

Talking about glassing a planet easily is bombastic language and not a neutral point of view

This submission is not FM approved @Wes

I will finish this: asap
 

Wes

Founder & Admin
Staff Member
FM of Yamatai
Game Master
STO Fleet Member
FM approved, but the article's OOC notes need to say that Khasidel was the original creator and designer, and also they need Adam Kopala's art credits.
 

Immortal Cyan

The Cyan Neko
FM approved, but the article's OOC notes need to say that Khasidel was the original creator and designer, and also they need Adam Kopala's art credits.
You need text after major headers/ before images/bullets/charts/etc. You do this in History and Background and Appearance and in these two instances:
NOTES:
Vehicle Complement
TEXT
Power Armor

Ship Systems
TEXT
Armored Hull and Hull Integrated Systems


It is hangar not hanger

Talking about glassing a planet easily is bombastic language and not a neutral point of view

This submission is not FM approved @Wes

I will finish this: asap


I have accomplished these things.
 

club24

Everything Is Magical
FM of Neshaten
Game Master
I'm fairly sure you're allowed to make a WIP version with your proposed edits to submit, not to be rude but no one else has brought it up and many people have said in the history of the world "If you want something done do it yourself"
 

Alex Hart

Site Supporter
Submissions Reviewer
Game Master
Manager of Origin Industries
I’m not sure if @Ametheliana just didn’t read the sub articles or if she thougjt the fire rates were fine. Either is a problem.

She also let the ship have weapons far in excess of weapons limitations, which she absolutely should not have done.
 
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