club24
Everything Is Magical
@Primitive Polygon here we go, one doctor death
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Approved Character [YSS Komainu] Shi Fumetsu
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@Primitive Polygon here we go, one doctor death
Primitive Polygon
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You certainly pumped this one out fast, Clubbers... Yee, since I already sorta looked at this, it's basically all well and good.
Two small things did catch my eye, though; In the first paragraph of their history, second sentence, I'm guessing you meant coarse, not course.
The second thing is that I'm pretty sure a labcoat is against the uniform policy, especially a messed up one. The Komainu is going to be hectic anyway, but I'm pretty sure those other ships in her history wouldn't have been happy about it. At the very least, it might be worth mentioning that they had to recover that coat personally rather than them getting just given it back... Is it even on top of their uniform, or just a plain clothes thing, come to think of it?...
I mean, Tsuguka is still going to tell them off for it too, but we'll work on that in-RP, heh.
With those changes made, I think it would look pretty darn decent.
Two small things did catch my eye, though; In the first paragraph of their history, second sentence, I'm guessing you meant coarse, not course.
The second thing is that I'm pretty sure a labcoat is against the uniform policy, especially a messed up one. The Komainu is going to be hectic anyway, but I'm pretty sure those other ships in her history wouldn't have been happy about it. At the very least, it might be worth mentioning that they had to recover that coat personally rather than them getting just given it back... Is it even on top of their uniform, or just a plain clothes thing, come to think of it?...
I mean, Tsuguka is still going to tell them off for it too, but we'll work on that in-RP, heh.
With those changes made, I think it would look pretty darn decent.
club24
Everything Is Magical
I’m typing this before I actually do it but the page is basically gonna explain that the coat is part of casual dress not with uniform *except shes on bad cat boat and sneaks it on sometimes* also yeah I’ll make her beg for the old one
EDIT: in her description it actually already did say that she only wears the coat when not in uniform or special attire, but i've changed the history about getting the old one back
EDIT: in her description it actually already did say that she only wears the coat when not in uniform or special attire, but i've changed the history about getting the old one back
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Primitive Polygon
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Looks good. Death/surgery obsession cat gets a thumbs up from me.
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As far as the coat, maybe that type of information can be added into the lore/wiki at some point since labcoats are cool to have on those teal n green panels imo.
Otherwise, she might want to have some of the standard medical supplied in her inventory that are listed within this series of bullet points.
Moving this since that's an easy change and you've got GM approval.
Otherwise, she might want to have some of the standard medical supplied in her inventory that are listed within this series of bullet points.
Moving this since that's an easy change and you've got GM approval.
