Well, I can tell you right now that this character doesn't work on several levels. One, a character who's already been involved in canon RP can't just be rewritten and passed over. That character sheet needs to remain up, for lack of a better way to say it, for posterity. If you want to run a new character, that's fine, but once something is established and used in canon, it's a HUGE no-no to just remove it and move on.
On the character itself, him being a Heisho won't fly. You've never had a character at that rank before, and neither myself or Kyle approved that rank, so the highest rank you can make a character at is Santo Hei.
If he WAS allowed in as a Heisho, you'd need about triple that much history, easily. A Heisho is like a senior enlisted in the military today. It means they've been in for years, they're heavily experienced, and trusted to lead groups of soldiers. With a character that hasn't been used in RP, you better give me a good history to back up that rank.
So, long story short, you can either tweak the existing character that was there BEFORE these edits, and we can work out how to get him onto the ship, without fucking up stuff that has already happened in canon, or you can undo the edits, and make a whole new character from scratch. Either one is workable, it's up to you.
This submission is on hold and ineligible for approval until extensive changes are made.