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Starchaser Class Civilian Ferry

Kim

Kim

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Andrew said:
StarChaser Class Civilian Ferry

The first in a series of civilian vessels designed and manufactured by Motoyoshi Fleet Yards, a subsidiary company of NovaCorp.
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Uso said:
Alright, time for another strafing run on the tech forums. I’m just going to go in order of what I see in the submission.

Wes will undoubtedly ask for a picture both under the title and in the appearance section. It shouldn’t be to hard to either make one in DOGA or ask someone to make one for you.

I like the Namesake bit and the wording used in it. It implies a lot of back story and RP behind the ship without creating any real issues with continuality. I may have to steal this bit from you. I also like how you switched to the design goals bit to add more of a civilian feel.

Under general your listing isn’t in the exact same format as the template but I don’t think that should matter, though it is a bit weird to look at.

I can see why you listed the water speed in knots but you might want to list it in km/hr too for ease of use.

Under bridge it says the captains chair faces the three other stations but four are listed. (Navigation, sensors, comm.+schedule, and pilot/engineering)

Descriptions in most of the areas seem a bit skimpy. I’d like to see a bit more description in the notable internal features area at least so players will have a better idea of what everything looks like.

The shields are listed at DR2, but flying micrometeorites and such would be DR3 or 4ish at least. I would think you would want a more powerful shield just so you don’t have to worry about that but it is your choice and not something to hold up approval over.
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Andrew said:
Uso said:
Alright, time for another strafing run on the tech forums. I’m just going to go in order of what I see in the submission.

Wes will undoubtedly ask for a picture both under the title and in the appearance section. It shouldn’t be to hard to either make one in DOGA or ask someone to make one for you.

I like the Namesake bit and the wording used in it. It implies a lot of back story and RP behind the ship without creating any real issues with continuality. I may have to steal this bit from you. I also like how you switched to the design goals bit to add more of a civilian feel.

Under general your listing isn’t in the exact same format as the template but I don’t think that should matter, though it is a bit weird to look at.

I can see why you listed the water speed in knots but you might want to list it in km/hr too for ease of use.

Under bridge it says the captains chair faces the three other stations but four are listed. (Navigation, sensors, comm.+schedule, and pilot/engineering)

Descriptions in most of the areas seem a bit skimpy. I’d like to see a bit more description in the notable internal features area at least so players will have a better idea of what everything looks like.

The shields are listed at DR2, but flying micrometeorites and such would be DR3 or 4ish at least. I would think you would want a more powerful shield just so you don’t have to worry about that but it is your choice and not something to hold up approval over.
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Bridge stations are 1) Navigation 2)Sensors, Comm and Scheduling (one station) 3) Pilot/Engineering

Alright will expand on internal descriptions.

I will increase the shield DR to 3.

Thanks for the review :)

Updated includes picture and changes.
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Artwork added, I have a few other planned edits however. Will bump again when I get the chance to finish them.
 
I like it, as it makes use of the Fifth's limited resources. It seems to be cheap and easy to produce, using simple steel, titanium steel, and depleted uranium alloys for the construction and heavy water fusion generators for power. In all honesty this thing reminds me of a commercial airline of the SARP. :geek: Though I am curious (more along the lines of personally curious) about the hyperspace communications fees.

In all honesty the design is kept simple, and resource friendly so I can't find much wrong with it.

This is approved for IC Usage.
 
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