With andrew currently on a medical hiatus for his own personal health i will be taking over this submission.
Lets dust off the old checklist~
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] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
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] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
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] 3. The article follows our wiki style guidelines, including: No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.
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] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar
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] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
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] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels
[ / ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and sourced responsibly (contact Wes privately if there's a concern)
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] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
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] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
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] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.
Here's some fixes this article still needs:
While not required, the namespace should end as lewd_armor. Instead of just
lewd for convenience sake.
The article is not particularly easy to read. The information is all over the place, with skub sections being too bare as compared to the
function and design, with a lot of prose left bare and the original placeholder text still present and not replaced at all with an alternative.
Some of the grammer is lacking in regards to running sentences in the descriptive prose under the articles title header. If you need help on understanding this give ame's
Sentence Guide a glance.
The Nomenclature is there for marking and searching sake and convenience. It would look closer to something like
s6-xx-xx .
This system is clearly a form of vehicular armor but is only mentioned this once and in very little detail. Until that point i was under the impression it was possibly an armored vest. Please make it clear in the opening sentences of the article
exactly what this armor is meant to be used with.
This system has no descriptive scale in regards to its size or armor class. Such a system will need to be categorized in the DRv3 scale as all armors must. Otherwise its just staple-on plot armor that makes it invincible be it on a T-3 car or a T-10 tank. Examples of damage it can take to give readers of the article an idea of how to treat it without you having to call them out or them needing to contact you for your original idea are paramount.
@HarperMadi please consider these changes and post here when they are made. Or with further questions or concerns.