This review is for: 400mm Railgun
The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[na] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[x]Lacking Detail
The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[na] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Article does not describe the actual 400mm shell.
Note here if any minor issues are present. These are issues you would like to see changed but will not necessarily hold up approval
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.
Status: Approved
Notes
The article provides no information on the shell being fired other than its diameter 400mm. What is it made out of? How long is it? How is it loaded? Article makes mention of "due to its ammunition consumption." Are the rounds merely slugs or do they have explosive warheads.
Okay, page has been updated to point to Abwehran Armed Forces Ammunition page which provides details, and Damage Rating changed to refer to the page for specific shells.
Good to go