1) His species is not Iroma, he's an Iromakuanhe
2) "Altair Khorvash was born in 16 AR/ 21 YE" He wasn't born
in 16 AR he
is 16 AR. The
current year is 941. He would be born in 925 AR.
3) At his
current rank he would not be a frame runner.
4) "While not a top notch hand to hand combatant, he has trained and is not helpless in hand to hand." I want to know why he's not very good at this or just have him be as good as he should be.
5) Typically there are seven skill areas.
6) There are a wealth of possible
sports he could have been interested in and you don't have to limit yourself to him only making a hand glider.
7) It would be great if you could link to Eyr Ranr, Astral Vanguard, his rank, etc. I want someone that has no idea what an Iromakuanhe is to be able to look at your profile and have all of the tools to be able to know. It's not required, and I can help you if you don't know how.
8) It would also be great if you could add height/ weight in feet/ cm and lbs/ kg to the top box. Not required, but very helpful.