Well...my head is swooning with bright colors and new ideas after reading everything that has been said. x.X; Well, where to start? I think you guys have brought be to your level on the heighth issue by this point...In that area I guess I got a little TOO by the book, for in the CCG it states that Yamataians are a new race, modeled after...blah blah blah...anyhow it says to check out the Geshrins, so I did, and lo and behold it gives me the average height for my character as 6'1" o.o But alas, it must be dealt with.
Well, with the distinguishing characteristics it was a bit hard only having a year old body <_<; But...I suppose I could conjur something up. Military nut left and right! Is he really that bad?
I didn't think the history was bad, and I don't think people should be pushed to drop "excess details" from their character histories...
I think I'm gonna go with Wes on this one. Though I am following you on the history shortening and what not. I suppose I'll shorten some things a little, but nothing too big.
I find the bit about both elder brother and father leaving utterly irresponsible on the father's part...
Irresponsible in a sense, but not terrible. Kanaye was well into maturity and what not by that time, the matters of the fathers friend is just there because Kanaye was underaged, just to make it seem a bit more realistic.
In any case, the part about him remembering his mother's words is, once again, far-fetched, considering it's a memory he would have had since before his 5 years old?
With the mothers words about school and what not, I actually wanted to put in that his father told him about that or something, but I guess I was trying to skip details in the wrong places. u.u
You have to be pretty lame to serve the SA for two years and not have a better rank than soldier 3rd-class.
Heh heh...maybe he is lame? Joking. Well, I ran into trouble around that part. I agree being in the SA for two years and still being Santô Hei is a bit sad...but I couldn't really find anything to close the gaps, "tie up loose ends". Military nut again. o.o
Okay, THAT I don't swallow. As much a military nut as your character could have had been, the part about father and older brother training him with power armor is totally ludicrous. I'll tell you why : power armors belong to the star army and are not given to individuals... your character really couldn't have gotten his hand on one before his army training, really.
Once again, I was kind of aiming in a different direction with the power armor thing. I think I wanted more of a..."taught him everything they knew about power armors". Available after YE 23 you say? That part I must have overlooked somewhere, thanks for pointing it out.
Is he good at power armors or starships? Basics for starships is starship operations. Try to single out his center of interest. I think it's too broad.
Well...power armors I say! Down with the monopoliptic starships! o.o! Yeah, using the power armors powered down was an ill thought out idea on my part.
Furthermore, that's a LOT of stuff to cram into your star army traing.I didn't really want all that stuff to be part of his military training.
Notice I said during and previous, I meant that they
were things that he took part in throughout school, and on some of his freetime during training. I'll clarify that a bit.
Cultural history as a skill though implies that he's trained as an historian, and that he could teach it and stuff...
He doesn't have to be a trained professional to have knowledge of cultural study. It just may as well have been a class that he took during college and picked up on.
Yes, all out indeed there Kotori... x.x I understand you just mean to help, and you have. Thanks.
Also, why do you keep putting "arm" instead of "armor?"
Also, I don't have a problem with a photographic memory, since you could alway look up what he saw in the RP by reading past transcripts.
Ah...welll the "arm" instead of "armor" was a mistake the whole way through. I guess I was just hearing it as "arm" in my head as I was typing. o.o; ~Voices...~ Well...I didn't mean him to really have a photographic memory, which is why I said "nearly" photographic, as in long-term maybe? Thanks for all your view points.
P.S.
Once more...finally, I would like to state that Kanaye
is not an orphan. Like I already said twice before, he was already mature and reaching 'adulthood' by the time his father and brother left. The issue with the fathers friend was
only a precautionary, legal matter.[/quote]
