Approved Character [Ascension] Kiana Adrasteia

[Ethereal]

Here ya go @FrostJaeger, my body is ready for the corrections xD

 

[FrostJaeger]

@Ethereal - here's my (very - I got to get better at writing these >.< - belated) review of Kiana Adrasteia.

• Major Things
  • As they're big birbs, would you mind changing the names Kiana, Acacius, and Euthemia to names that end in -al, -el, or -ul, please?
  • Would you mind making Kiana older, please? Twenty is a bit too young for a high-ranking flag officer, in my opinion - especially since she would've only been eighteen when the Elysian Celestial Navy was (effectively) disbanded in YE 32.
  • As there - to the best of my knowledge - wasn't a rank named "Stratigos" in the Elysian Celestial Navy, would you mind if Kiana was the Legati of the Kalikolo Fleet at the time of its disbandment?
  • Would you mind adding a Skills Learned with the names - not the descriptions, just the names - of seven skill areas, please?
• Minor Things
  • Would you mind adding a sentence or two underneath the list in the Physical Description, please? It's primarily for styling reasons.
  • Under Social Connections, it says "CHARACTER NAME".

Again, sorry for how late this is >.<;;

 

[Ethereal]

Updated a little, I've been super busy with end-of-term work. I've added a lot minus skill and more description.

 

[FrostJaeger]

Having looked over the aforementioned updates, as the Faction Manager of Elysia and the Game Master of Ascension I'm going to go ahead and APPROVE Kianal Adrasteia for usage within the roleplay.

Welcome to the Senate, Honorable Colleague.