This review is for: HARD, An Asteria Thing[/url]
The submitted article is/has…
[Y ] A very high level of overall quality
[Y ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[N/A ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[MAYBE ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[N/A ] In the proper format/template
[Y ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[Y ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[N ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link) SEE BELOW
[Y ] No red and/or broken links
[N/A ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[Y ] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[N ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[N ] Obtusely redundant
[N ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[N ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[N ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[N ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[N ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[N ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[N ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[MAYBE ] Lacking Detail (See below)
[N/A ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[N/A ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[N/A ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[N/A ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[N/A ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
The article seems overall alright. It would be appreciated if some of the skills that are closer to the top of the page received expansions to their descriptions; some are only a couple lines while skills further down have significantly longer descriptions.
Who/what is the Mikado? A link in the page would be appreciated.
Status: Pending
Notes
Are participants supposed to have every skill listed? I'm aware that specialization is a focus, but this seems slightly unclear.
A lot of the page's bulk is the skills section. While this section is important, I believe other parts could use expansion/improvement-For example, what are general "roles" that a HARD force would have? A commander, perhaps a heavy weapons specialist or a medic as well? Having "general roles" for Operators may be helpful for if people were to organize a HARD force in a plot but are for some reason or another unable to contact you.
Also, perhaps knowing requirements for a HARD team-could anybody feasibly sign up to join, or do they need prior service to even come close to trying to sign up?
I intend to finish this review by: FRIDAY, 10/6/2017