Approved Submission [Asteria] The Order of the Knight Marshal

[Noodles]

Submission Type: Military Law Enforcement
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=faction:asteria:order_of_the_knight_marshal

Faction:
FM Approved Yet? (Yes- @Gallant 2017/09/25)
Faction requires art? (No)

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (No)
Contains New art? (Yes)
Previously Submitted? (No)
Notes:
I am aware that the URL contains a spelling error, but I was told by @Wes that it could be fixed during/after approval.

Anyway, this is meant to be a multi-function military law enforcement organization, namely Internal Affairs/Military Police.

 

[Gallant]

View attachment 14574

ASTERIAN FM APPROVAL CONFIRMATION.

That art looks amazing.

 

[Wes]

Please wikify this article by adding appropriate wiki links to things like YE 39 that appear in the article.

 

[Noodles]

I didn't see too much else to wikify, but I added links in a few other places!
Hope that's better. :0

 

[Noodles]

Better @Wes?

I also updated the uniform section a tad.
https://gyazo.com/f818ec0050b2cb8c91be6662f273a3c3

 

[Wes]

In order to meet wiki style guidelines each header needs some text to follow it before the next header. In particular the title header needs text there. Maybe you could put some of the overview there and make a separate history section.

 

[Noodles]

I took a bit from the Overview and moved it, as well as seperated the History/Overview section into entirely seperate ones.

Anything else need fixing, @Wes?

 

[Wes]

The Goals section is still empty. Everything looks great. We're about ready.

 

[Noodles]

I removed the 'Goals' header, it was somewhat out of place anyway!

 

[Wes]

Approved.

 

[Noodles]

Awesome, super appreciate it, Wes!

I think I need to see the checklist thing too though?

 

[Ametheliana]

I'll just do this for Wes as I've read the article.

This review is for: Asterian Order of the Knight Marshal with URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=faction:asteria:order_of_the_knight_marshal

The submitted article is/has…
[^^] A very high level of overall quality
[^^] A general topic sentence under the title header
[^^] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[^^] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[^^] In the proper format/template
[^^] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[^^] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[^^] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[^^] No red and/or broken links
[^^] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[^^] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[^^] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[^^] Obtusely redundant
[^^] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[^^] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[^^] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[^^] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[^^] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[^^] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[^^] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[^^] Lacking Detail
[^^] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[n/a] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[n/a] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[^^] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[^^] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.

Approved

 

[Noodles]

Thanks Ame!

You da bomb!