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Approved Character [Battlefield Education] Brynhildr Nishizaki

Acewing13

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link: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:brynhildr_nishizaki

@Reynolds @Ametheliana

I mostly just don't have the colors/number of clothes not done for the inventory and I haven't started on the skills yet...they're kind of in the history and personality and need to be better defined. Mostly want to get this checked out by someone else, its giving me a headache.

Also, I reference the teacher character that I was going to get to work on next, if you still want me to do that. If not, I can change it around to work without it.
 
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The history and personality are a-okay, save a few spelling/ grammar issues that are minor.

Since you didn't mention that you're working on social connections, still, I wanted to point out to change the two problems here:
CHARACTER name is connected to:

Gerhard Amachi (Father)
Huld Nishizaki (Mother)
(Friend)
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Inventory shouldn't be bulleted like that, but I'm sure you're well aware and working on it.

Just finish her up!
 
You already have more info in the inventory than most everyone else. You don't need to get too specific with it yet. You can always update that stuff in the RP as you figure out how she dresses and acts.

You only need a handful of skills, really, since the character is young. Fighting, Communications, pick a school thing they excel at, hobby. Done!
 
Needs to be moved to a good URL
 
I did notice that was a strange name. Should be easy to copy/paste to the proper page, then clear/delete the old one.
 
updated the first post and I think I finished the document. Let me know what you think and if I fixed everything.
 
Looks good to me! You're APPROVED and I'll add you to the wiki if @Wes can move this thread to the proper place. Thanks!
 
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