Approved Character Beaumont

[Trainscanflytoo]

Thought I'd give making my own character without any help a shot.
I didn't put a specific RP in the title of the thread because I've listed multiple potential RPs I'm considering putting him in.
Hope you like it!

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:beaumont

 

[Kim]

As I mentioned on the chat, I will give this character a look tomorrow!

 

[Kim]

As per my conversation on voice with Trains. I've asked him to clarify the abilities of the cybernetic body and have some conversations with the GMs of the plots he is interested in joining. I didn't see anything really wrong with the bio aside from some minor writing style issues.

Shady things happen in Funky City and I could see there being a fertility clinic scam for those that might not be able to afford clones or able to naturally conceive.

 

[Trainscanflytoo]

If you could give me specifics in regards to the grammar issues, I'd be more than willing to improve on them.

 

[Kim]

Some of your wording is rather passive. It's fine, it's just a style choice. I fall into it too. https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/owlprint/539/

 

[Trainscanflytoo]

Alright, I was lazy and didn't go into the more subtle grammar issues, but I DID add detail on the nature of his cybernetic body.

 

[Trainscanflytoo]

@Zack I spoke with Jack about letting him join the USO RP. He'll be added in once he's approved!

 

[Zack]

Cool, you have FM approval and such.

I'd like @Jack Pine to do give the GM approval to use the character. He'll be doing GM stuff for 188604 going forward.

 

[Kim]

HA. It looks good. Nice detail on the body's abilities.

 

[Trainscanflytoo]

Thank you! Wrote down as much as I could think of!

 

[Jack Pine]

@GM APPROVED