B Belial Inactive Member Jan 9, 2009 #1 Hopefully I didn't screw this up. Behold! A link to my character. Righteous.
Kai Retired Staff Jan 9, 2009 #2 Aside from a rather large number of spelling errors, I like it. He is skilled while not being overpowered, and has an interesting and unique history. Clean up the spelling A LOT and it should be good.
Aside from a rather large number of spelling errors, I like it. He is skilled while not being overpowered, and has an interesting and unique history. Clean up the spelling A LOT and it should be good.
Nashoba SARPaholic & Admin Retired Staff Inactive Member Convention Veteran Jan 9, 2009 #3 Numerous typos Description posses should be possesses Personality whom reeks should be who reeks Belial trends towards -> Belial tends towards posses a mile-long - > possesses a mile-long History making the the latter -> making the latter Skills Communications needs to be fixed. Look at the standard Nepleslian training, they wouldn't let him progress if he didn't meet muster. "have these skills trained into them through a rigorous boot camp training program" So at least the items in the list for basic, should be better represented. https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=writing_your_character_s_skills Inventory Starting money is missing. Starting pay of: 6000 DA This character is not yet approved for use Overall an excellent first attempt.
Numerous typos Description posses should be possesses Personality whom reeks should be who reeks Belial trends towards -> Belial tends towards posses a mile-long - > possesses a mile-long History making the the latter -> making the latter Skills Communications needs to be fixed. Look at the standard Nepleslian training, they wouldn't let him progress if he didn't meet muster. "have these skills trained into them through a rigorous boot camp training program" So at least the items in the list for basic, should be better represented. https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=writing_your_character_s_skills Inventory Starting money is missing. Starting pay of: 6000 DA This character is not yet approved for use Overall an excellent first attempt.
B Belial Inactive Member Jan 9, 2009 #4 Yes, thank you, I was just trying to hunt them down myself and missed a good half of them. Edited.
Nashoba SARPaholic & Admin Retired Staff Inactive Member Convention Veteran Jan 9, 2009 #5 Great Job, be sure to put in your request for orders here viewtopic.php?f=40&t=460 This character is approved for IC Usage. Welcome to the SARP !!!
Great Job, be sure to put in your request for orders here viewtopic.php?f=40&t=460 This character is approved for IC Usage. Welcome to the SARP !!!