This review is for: Black Spiral Warrior Dress
The submitted article is/hasβ¦
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[-] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does notβ¦
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (βyouβ or βyourβ) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (βvirtually immune,β βnearly indestructible,β βinsanely powerful,β βhorrible effectsβ)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article hasβ¦
[na ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines - Not listed
[-] Lacking Detail - what powers the AIES? It seems given what you are using it for, that an AIES is a bit overpowered for a suit of clothing. Additionally, what powers the cloth of the uniform?
I would like to see more details about the camouflage fabric being used, basic how it works, how fine is the ability to change color? Pattern?
[-] Needed and/or useful to the setting - why exactly is this needed? we have a field uniform,
Status: Pending
Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.
I intend to finish this review by: 3/8/2012