This review is for: Origin Upgrade
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:origin_pile_driver_energy_shield_upgrade
The submitted article is/has…
[NO] A very high level of overall quality
[NO] A general topic sentence under the title header
[NO] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons) - does not need
[/] Needed and/or useful to the setting
unsure
[NO] In the proper format/template
[NO] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[NO] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[X] No red and/or broken links
[X] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[YES] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[X] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[X] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[NOT PRESENT] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[NOT PRESENT] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[NOT PRESENT] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
- No prose in the section
- It's error(s): see
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=guide:its
- Spellcheck needed
- Bullet point contains way too much text - I recommend using a header === Pile Drive Upgrade === instead of
Pile Driver upgrade:
Status: Pending
Notes
Aether weapons are restricted under Yamataian law
I intend to finish this review by: June 7, 2018