Approved Submission Brimstone Shipping Co.

Hey Jack!

I've started to take a look at the submission. I think you should take an editorial pass on it - there's a lot of sentences that feel half-finished, repeat a line from a previous paragraph, etc. It all has a flow-of-consciousness feel to it isn't inherently problematic but isn't the right grammar for a submission.

The Quality Check plugin also says there's some incorrectly nested sections, so please get that resolved.

Let me know if you need help figuring out the above.

Thanks for the submission!

I think I've fixed most of it, and fixed the nesting as requested.

If you can provide a location for 'Alamo' and fix some of the capitalizations in the last section, I think we're good to go. I don't see anything else that will hold up the review.

I'd have to make a whole new system then for it, unless someone wants to volunteer one.

Staff chatted on this a bit and decided that you don't have to make or use a system for Alamo - just give a general idea of where it's at. "So-and-so lightyears from X system" or "About 2 days Travel from so-and-so planet" would be good ways to give it some presence in the universe without getting too specific.

Get that sorted and I think this is good.

added to it's section that it's three days north of Vale system in the NDC, deep into unclaimed space.

Alright, thanks! Approved!