Prowler
Inactive Member
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ch ... dr_armatri
Requested Approval for UCS Zenpyou plot ship.
Requested Approval for UCS Zenpyou plot ship.
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Approved Character Brynhildr Armatri
- Thread starter Prowler
- Start date
Humanities Needs to be more specific.
From the UOCP Skills.
Hamanities: This character is familiar with the provisions of the Peacekeeper Charter of YE 30 and is familiar with the basic skills of negotiating, first contact, and psychology.
Scars is misspelled "scares" in several places.
Just my 2 cents worth.
From the UOCP Skills.
Hamanities: This character is familiar with the provisions of the Peacekeeper Charter of YE 30 and is familiar with the basic skills of negotiating, first contact, and psychology.
Scars is misspelled "scares" in several places.
Just my 2 cents worth.
The thing that trips me up right now is his love for battle, in a sense ... yet he's a combat medic. A position that involves more healing than fighting. Why a medic? You say later in the Medical skill that he wants to heal his fellow soldier. If that's really the case, why does he love to fight so much?
Also:
Lastly: Go back and standardize the skills. The Medical skill you have to modify anyway, as he's going to be more advanced at it. Right now, the rest of your skills read poorly; they're vague and overly broad, leaving other players unsure of what he can actually do.
The rest of the skills should be standardized to this list here.
This character is pending. The submitter must address the list of edits above and reply to the thread when it is ready for review.
Also:
Complex medical surgeries in the field, eh? IIIII'm going to say no there. That's making the character very capable to the point of being overpowered, when the character has had no previous medical training prior to joining the military. He can be better than the standard, but not a field doctor.
Lastly: Go back and standardize the skills. The Medical skill you have to modify anyway, as he's going to be more advanced at it. Right now, the rest of your skills read poorly; they're vague and overly broad, leaving other players unsure of what he can actually do.
The rest of the skills should be standardized to this list here.
This character is pending. The submitter must address the list of edits above and reply to the thread when it is ready for review.
Prowler
Inactive Member
I finished those tasks. If there is anything else you wish for me to fix feel free to ask Doshii Jun. We might have disagreed in the past, but I realize my folly now. I wish to improve on my character for the better of the RP. Any feedback. Even if you think its a small problem, tell me and I will be sure to try and fix it.
We disagreed in the past? *shrugs* I can't remember, so it's probably not important. You're 16 now; that's all that matters to me.
In Technology Operation, you misspelled Brynhildr.
Otherwise, the changes are OK.
This character is approved for IC usage. Please file orders here.
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In Technology Operation, you misspelled Brynhildr.
Otherwise, the changes are OK.
This character is approved for IC usage. Please file orders here.
Welcome to the Star Army Role-Play.
