1, It does not boast a better laboratory than any Yamataian ship, at least I'd be uncertain about that. I suggest using some other phrase.
2, I'm not sure you should use the term ‘lovely'. Lovely is subjective and highly personal. These submissions are meant to be largely objective.
3, If the design was only finalized after the design of the Perry was approved how can it avoid the problems inherent in the Perry's construction?
4, What are the other fleets, just of interest?
5, Carthage Base? What is this? Has it been approved?
6, ... You haven't provided armour rating with your sections.
7, A ‘killer' surround sound stereo? I'd reword this.
8, Your Captain has a suite title but not a description.
9, And from the layout the officers have a larger room than the captain.
10, ‘Folding flush'?
11, What happens after two years?
12, So they don't get quarters on short missions?
13, Why does washroom come under recreation?
14, More detail on the mess halls would be good for RP purposes.
15, I do think that recreation has to be gone into in more detail for RP purposes.
16, To date for Carthage that is, right?
17, Details on what alloys used might be nice.
18, In a ship which contains a spa and other luxuries, why have maintenance areas which are uncomfortable?
19, Also it's ‘through', not ‘thru'.
20, Could be fun to know what actual technology is in the medbay. And given that lots of RP happens when people are injured it might be nice to have a description.
21, Are you using LED's for the illumination? Panel style?
22, How are the power armours stored?
23, Please, not Neutronium. A teaspoon of neutron star material weighs a billion tons (1.016 billion tonnes). Or more. And outside a star should explode.
24, Miniscule amounts? I doubt it.
25, Also – though, not thou.
26, Volumetric projection, not hologram.
27, 1,300? That's not so much an escape pod as a full blown ship.
28, How fast can it move?
29, I'm still really not happy with these Collapsed Dimensional Shields. As far as I'm concerned you're technobabbling. Dimensions don't really work that way.
30, Mercurite is a solid substance. How can you keep the shields up or down?
31, ... Tachyon particles really don't work that way.
32, If it's just anti-matter how does it annihilate 45 miles?
33, How do you generate and restore your anti-matter?
34, More details needed on shuttles to make them RP worthy.