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Daho'te Jyaon (Fighting Forms)

Nashoba

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Submission Type: Fighting styles
Submission URL: Daho'te Jyaon (Fighting Forms)

Faction: Hidden Sun Clan
FM Approved Yet? Yes - Me

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Yes
Previously Submitted? No

Notes:
The individual style pages are new and most of the melee weapons are as well. The shock and duel blades were approved awhile back.
 
This review is for: Daho'te Jyaon (Fighting Forms)

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[OK] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[OK] Obtusely redundant
[OK] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[OK] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[OK] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[OK] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[OK] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[OK] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[OK] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[OK] Lacking Detail
[OK] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[N/A] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[N/A] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[N/A] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[N/A] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** None Found. Submission is in compliance.

Status: Approved.

Notes
No Notes.

I intend to finish this review by: FINISHED
 
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