Denado Refining ship

[Ira]

Submission Type: Civilian Ship
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ga ... e_refinery

Faction: Gartagen Union
FM Approved Yet? Yes

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Yes, the Leono Corvette: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ga ... pace_miner
Previously Submitted? No

Notes: I have often talked about Gartagen mining Operations. I need more civilian ships, and this certainly will put some definition on it. The ship is large, but it only has defensive weapons making it prime civilian material.

 

[Wes]

Look good overall, although there are some blank sections:

Statistics and Performance
Inside the Ship
Compartment Layouts
Ship Systems

 

[Ira]

Those sections were intended to break up the article a bit. For clarification purposes I added a little blurb stating that the section is.

 

[Andrew]

Review in Progress will be completed 12/28

 

[Andrew]

This review is for: Denado Mobile Refinery

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Obtusely redundant
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Lacking Detail
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[IN-COMPLIANCE] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[IN-COMPLIANCE] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[IN-COMPLIANCE] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
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Status: Approved.

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I intend to finish this review by: COMPLETED

 

[Andrew]

One thing I did want to suggest here is that you consider making some standard interiors for civilian vessels so that you can link then into your submissions.

 

[Ira]

I have SOME made, it is just tedious work, but I will do this.