[DSW] Starkwerk Touchcomputer

[SSharp]

Starkwerk Touchcomputer

Another moneymaker for Dietrich Starkwerk!

 

[Soresu]

Alright. Just a few things.

1) You're using past tense for features, etc etc.

It also came in glow-in-the-dark casings of all primary colors.

Mind changing such instances to present tense please?

2) The only information I have on Abwehran Processor Speeds is from this page. Did you consult it, or Abwehran_CMDR on current gen processor speeds for the civilian market before coming to the conclusion of 30GHz?

3) Where is the fan for the computer located? Is it a fan? Liquid cooled? Etc etc.

4) Any type of covering to protect the screen when not in use? A strap to carry? Little things to give more of a mental image and make it look nicer (Accessories) basically.

5) How much for a replacement battery?

6) Single Core Processor? Multi?

7) What's it made of?

 

[SSharp]

Added in some of your suggestions. Made some necessary edits.

The GHz thing was a goof because I didn't do any research. Thank you for pointing that out.

Mobile super computers -- what's next?

 

[Soresu]

The screen was able to display in the full range of vision of the typical Surfacer with the option of dimmer screens for Nightwalkers.

Change 'was' to 'is'

The computer had more space, ran faster, and fielded (at the time) a tougher security system than its other civilian peers at the time of its design.

Change 'had' to has.

the outside casing came in a wide variety of different colors including red, blue, black, yellow and more. It also came in glow-in-the-dark casings of all primary colors.

Change 'came' to comes.

And it should be ready. And one more thing. How is it cooled? Like a laptop, this sucker will heat up and burn your lap if you're not careful. Once all the above is done with it's good to go.

 

[SSharp]

Fixed all the grammar mistakes you pointed out, and a couple more.

Added fans and intake vents.

 

[Soresu]

Alright. Approved.