Kyoki
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Approved Character Eleanor "El" Krasnova
- Thread starter Kyoki
- Start date
Aendri
Inactive Member
Well, before I review the character, I'd like an okay from Fian or another Nep GM on this, since the Acadia is mainly a combat plot, without any players on the crew.
edit: Still want a go or not, but I'll review since Kyoki thinks it's okay. Getting changes done via IRC.
Not sure about roller derby, but I won't make you change it unless I know it's not around.
In the last paragraph of history, change due to do.
In general, I love your skills. You changed the boilerplate, but kept the necessary parts and made them yours. Vehicles, however, is the only one I'm not sure on. I'd like some input on whether or not you're referring to space fighters or not, and from GMs on whether vehicles applies to those or if you need starship ops for that.
"as well as keep clear who is in charge of who, even in intense situations" I'd recommend rephrasing the first part of that, just for readability.
Two things in inventory. One is that you cut out the entire Personal Hygiene section, the other is your bass. Just specify whether it's electric or not. I'd also say you can add a bit of your cash back in, since your history justifies having the bass. Not all, but a thousand or so.
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edit: Still want a go or not, but I'll review since Kyoki thinks it's okay. Getting changes done via IRC.
Not sure about roller derby, but I won't make you change it unless I know it's not around.
In the last paragraph of history, change due to do.
In general, I love your skills. You changed the boilerplate, but kept the necessary parts and made them yours. Vehicles, however, is the only one I'm not sure on. I'd like some input on whether or not you're referring to space fighters or not, and from GMs on whether vehicles applies to those or if you need starship ops for that.
"as well as keep clear who is in charge of who, even in intense situations" I'd recommend rephrasing the first part of that, just for readability.
Two things in inventory. One is that you cut out the entire Personal Hygiene section, the other is your bass. Just specify whether it's electric or not. I'd also say you can add a bit of your cash back in, since your history justifies having the bass. Not all, but a thousand or so.
This profile needs GM input for approval.
