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variety if needs for the Royal Navy (Of not if)
and electronics suit (Suite)
longboat andand second launch. (delete reduncancy)
aboard cargo And has (lowercase and)
ships holds. (Should be shipโs)
Designer and manufacturer: The Royal Navy if Ersetu (Of not if)
Obsurvation dome (Observation)
Captains needs apostrophe
forward sensors (F needs capitalization)
Ships internal systems (Shipโs with an apostrophe)
The ships primary form (Shipโs needs an apostrophe)
its self (Is just one word, itself)
The ships mounts (I think this needs to just be ship, singular)
in the Royal Navy if Ersetu
of the ships skin (Shipโs with an apostrophe)
the ships engineering (Shipโs with an apostrophe)
What sort of โthick armor platingโ? What material? You say later โcomposite battle armorโ but does it have a name?
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