Pretty good first try. Here is my first pass at reviewing this.
Yes, Recruit is the first rank for the Peacekeepers
It is listed on the rank page "Usually a rank possessed by those who've just enlisted into service"
History
As for the family thing, I would prefer to at a minimum, know the status of the family, eg, Mother, Father, are they alive, dead? Siblings, they help to give an idea of where the character came from.
Skills General comment
Please review the following
Peacekeeper skills. And update the requisite skills accordingly.
Typos
Technical Operation
specialise > specialize
unspecialised > unspecialized
Fighting
armour > armor
Language
Nepleslian is normally the more commonly used language, could you explain why he's not as fluent?
Finances
UOC starting pay is 2000 HS not 3000 KS, Yamatai uses KS.
Also text makes mention of
She receives
Please address the above items. And then post that you have done so.
This character is not yet approved for IC usage.