Approved Character First Garty char

[ShotJon]

Hey there so I have writenn myself a little Gartagen lady. THere are no notable chars for Garty yet, so I will keep her in my sandbox and move here there once there will be notable Garatgen characters.

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=members:shotjon:miel

 

[Ira]

I corrected some spelling errors, and added a few things in the inventory.

I will attempt to get some unique character art in place of the Armor(which is gonna be the anon art for now)

Other then that the character looks good.

 

[Nashoba]

Unlike other Gartagen her hair threads are much thinner,

Why? What made her threads different? Birth defect, etc

She have nor dewclaw, nor poisons gland. - Grammar, She has neither dewclaw nor poison glands

Other than than she tend to do things....

grammar issues examples

Her father who was soldier and conservatives brought his military mind even into family life.

But even with this all Miel is not stuck-up lady.

 

[ShotJon]

I think I corrected all stated grammar issues.

About the hair I talked with Ira and he said that this can happen. It is non-common so edited the sentence so that is clear. I imagine it is about same as neko's hair being blue. OH and I also added hair-colour.

 

[Nashoba]

Approved.