Approved Submission [Galactic Horizon] 7.7mm Legion Revolver + Volt Ammo + Black Patent Revolver Assembly

[SirSkully]

Submission URL

https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:galactic_horizon:gh-w2-5b_7.7mm_legion_variable_revolver

List Any Unapproved Sub-Articles

Ammo WIP URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:corp:galactic_horizon:7.7mm_volt
Ammo URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:galactic_horizon:7.7mm_volt

Firing Mechanism WIP URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=wip:corp:galactic_horzion:black_patent_revolver_assembly
Firing Mechanism URL: https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=corp:galactic_horzion:black_patent_revolver_assembly

Submission Faction(s)

1. Neshaten

Submission Terms

1. I agree

Howdy

This is probably the last Galactic Horizon revolver I'll submit but I really like the idea of there being an article for a specific mechanism that can be utilized by other submissions in the future if people so desire, it is rather niche what with it being a revolver thing but still! (I do plan on maybe using it for non-GH articles in the future if I can kick my lazy ass back into gear, but it's something anyone can yeet onto an article if they want a revolver with a gas-sealed cylinder.)

Anyway, it should be a fairly straight-forward procedure, maybe just some grammatical fixes but I've had this sitting on the wiki for a while so I may as well submit it.

Technically this needs Nesh FM approval, and I'm the only active Nesh FM, so approved.

 

[Whisper]

Hey Skully!

I'll take this one on. Some things that stand out to me in an initial pass:

- There's some run-on sentences that make it hard to follow. A good example is the second paragraph of the Black-Patent Revolver Assembly's 'Function and Design' section. Could you do a scan through your articles and try to clean those up? It'll improve the overall flow.
- I need to do a little research on the feasibility/balance aspect of a revolver being Tier 3. The closest similar thing I found on a quick search is the Judge, which can go up to a single-shot Tier 3 with its variable ammo. Are there any rate of fire restrictions or anything along those lines for the stronger ammo types? It lists the recoil as 'very heavy' for that tier of ammo, but I'm not sure how that impacts the weapon's actual usage.

I'll give this one a couple of extra days for comments and research on my side.

Thanks!

 

[SirSkully]

The grammatical issues should be ironed out by now, as for the balancing I tried to make it clearer that trying to fire the larger calibers in rapid succession will kick the gun all over the place, since they have much more recoil.

I hope that works for you ^^

Edit: also, small thing, but I didn't see any 25mm ammo on the ammo page that the Judge links to?

 

[Whisper]

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Approved!