Approved Character [GM] Serhan Nejem

[Exhack]

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ch ... rhan_nejem

 

[Revolver]

Thanks for blowing away what I thought was a pretty awesome history with an even more awesome history. :V



Under the vehicles section you have a broken wiki link to the VANDR and there's no need for the Zodiac listing in your top infobox. Also, get rid of Measurements and Bra Size under his height and weight in the Physical Characteristics section.

 

[Nashoba]

Ack, another Iroma.... :lol:

First - Remove the Zodiac as it doesn't fit the Iroma.
Second - Remove from Physical characteristics
Measurements:
Bra Size:

Typos
Likes: Pilotting > Piloting conditionning > conditioning
Goals: defficient > deficient

Under Son of a Solar Cartographer
the the > the
Red link for Cohronl

School Days and Quiet Years
overstimulated > over stimulated

[b}Irkalla Squadron[/b]
oneupmanship > one-upmanship

Flight of the Wyrm
forget. Especially for Serhan. Fragment. Suggestion
forget, especially for Serhan.

Bahram wing
arcology ?? What is this?

Medical
Could you replaced preprepared with prepackaged. preprepared is really ugly or else make it hyphenated pre-prepared which is still ugly but not quite so.

Vehicles
[iromakuanhe:erla vandr]] appears in text instead of as a wiki link.


This character is pending approval for IC usage once these changes are made.

 

[Kai]

and reconciling (for the most part), Serhan and Sankhur were able reconcile.

huh?

 

[Wes]

Approved.

 

[Revolver]

Bahram wing
arcology ?? What is this?

This is an arcology: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Arcology

 

[Nashoba]

Perhaps then a wikipedia link [[wp>arcology]] to help others?
Nashoba.

 

[Exhack]

All articles fixed. The 'Cohronl' article will have to be completed soon, though.

 

[Nashoba]

I can live with that.

Dun dun dun, another Iroma leaves the next.... <Sung to Another one bites the dust.> hahaha

This character is approved for IC usage.