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Approved Character Hebi Chuutatsu

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Name: Hebi Chuutatsu (Bloodline name kept secret due to assignment.)
General Information
Species: Lorath Shaman.
Gender: Female.
Age: 60 years. (Appearance of a 30 year old.)

Family (or Creators): Mother and Father's name unknown, both originating from Lorath Shaman House.

Employer: Lorath Royal Family.
Occupation: Bodyguard and advisor.
Rank: Specialist.
Current Assignment: Bodyguard and "enforcerâ€
 
You would Tomoe >_>;

Again, I only worry about her history a bit, and one or two other things. I wanna wait a few days to see what others say about it first.
 
It's an NH-17 in a cocktail dress ^.^;

...and makeup exploded I think. Petite never sprung to mind of someone who was 5'9 with a C cup but sure..kay. The dead parent thing has become far too frequent here, to the point of being trite. So the history could be shaved a good bit~ Also, who trained her in rogue skills? Making a ghillie suit is more a military application than Rogue. Not sure why that'd be there.

...and please tell me there's no such thing as 'Lorath ninjitsu' or I might just lose all faith in the Human race ^^;

Also, what exactly is her mental condition? Is this supposed to be taking abilities from another house while being part of the other? Or is there something unexplained here that may lead us to understand the character better? Heee, that's all I can think of right now.
 
Indeed, overly detailed history, and orphans and cybernetic implants are cliche. I guess as one of the first Lorath characters, some of the history might slide. Add more to the personality section. Otherwise, good try.
 
Neural interfaces are often given to individuals who would be working with electronic components often. Such as starship crews, armor pilots, and scientists. But they can also be given to aid in communications between groups, such as communications between body guards.

The "ninjitsu" term is used in a generic sense. In other words its the arts of silent assasinations, use of various tools in combat, use of poions, etc etc. Much like the historical ninjas of japan. The skills were also taught by royaly funded instructors, coming from various backgrounds. Additonaly, a good thief should be able to conceal themselves, thus it would be logical to have some training in concealing one's presance under the rogue skill.

The history is meant to be a tad long to make up for the dead parents issue. Also the loss of her parents at a young age is esential to the character's... um.. character (lack of a better word at the moment).
 
Those don't really satisfy me, are you writing the character bio or is she? Her name means snake in Japanese, cute, but it's too different from the other Lorath names I've seen so far.

Pardon me if I think you can use another term then 'ninjitsu' really? I don't think it would be that hard. Maybe for a Yamatai culture, but the Lorath are supposed to be their own, even in a generic terms trying to apply it wreaks horrible images of certain poorly written anime to mind. :?
 
Rei said:
even in a generic terms trying to apply it wreaks horrible images of certain poorly written anime to mind. :?
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Uh oh... He went there....

Here Rei look at this then you will or should understand what's going on here.

Tiff is to me as Emma is to Doc

Chuu is Emma to clarify and she is a "N a ru t o" fan and if your gonna say that was a poorly written anime.... your just asking to start an argument. I agree space "n a ru t o" don't belong here but for some people who fall in love with a style that draws their attention it's sometimes hard to break free from that influence.

On the good side Emma you can put back one of your skills since Fighting and Physical count as one and the same.

((Yeah.... wes has the word Na ru to censored to say.... dirty horse.... something something...))
 
I tend to serve as Emma's representative. since she is often away from a computer with internet access she leaves me to tend to her affairs.

Also, if the term "ninjitsu" inspires thoughts of a certain anime involving ninjas and a demon fox, that is your own idea. But I use the term in relation to the combat style. Also, the term is used due to the fact that it would simply take too long to write up a title for a martial art, then explain the details of the art. I'll write up something for that later though. As for the name, i'll speak with her about it.

Also recently the Fighting and the Physical skills have been seperated, from what I saw.
 
What is her YIM name, again?

In all seriousness, good to hear it will be amended for the naming with a longer description.
 
gee... i'm sorry the name and the gerneal STYLE of my character annoys people. i'll change the name if it bothers so much of you. as for her style being "ninjutsu" i never asked for that. but tomoe is right when he says it's a term used for stelth, or lack there of. sorry if it annoyed you as well. therefore, it will change to please everyone.
 
May I just suggest you take the time to use capital letters? You will find your views much more respected.

I sit through recurring migraines and write (close to) properly in a language I dont speak very well; you can surely capitalize your sentences and proper nouns.

^.^
 
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