Approved Character (Independent)Betty Arturius

I know I'm not anyone who can approve anything, don't have any factions or run any games, but I have to be the first to ask:

Can you fix your link? It takes people specifically to Betty's finances at the very bottom of the page, rather than the top part of the wiki page.



[Edit] Jack fixed it and now it's all good to me. That's just me, though.

Speaking of approval, tagging @Soresu I guess...?

Thanks for tagging me, @FrostJaeger. As for you, Jack, well, I see some issues that I'd be more than happy to help with by supplying you with some info!

There is no such thing as "cohrontal ". But there is the Cohronl, which are a distinct sub-race of Iromakuanhe called the Cohronl. Is that what you meant?

Another thing is that the nation's name looks like this. "Astral Commonwealth".

I'm actually super curious how you arrived at the name Betty. To the Iroma, the Trade dialect was essentially a dead language until they began to make some headway into the Kikyo Sector. So perhaps the name you chose comes from that? Or perhaps she picked it if (Since I am not sure) she left the Commonwealth to venture into the Kikyo Sector? I mean if she was leaving the Commonwealth that is.

That is something else that I see is what plot did you intend to use her in? I do not see it on her page. ^^;

We also have a guide that may be of some use if you have any difficulties.

This character is actually sister to my other iroma, who is enlisted in the star army aboard the YSS-Hana. His name is Lucas Arturius. It does say now she ran away, and moved out west. I will fix the cohronl as I couldn't remember how to spell it.

Edit: cohronl has been fixed and linked, history clarified and updated. And I don't have a plot planned for her, so she'll be independent until I decide to place her in one.

That's fine, Jack. But are you sure you only want to give her three sentences worth of appearance and about the same for their personality? Or did you intend to fill this in as you play them?

I like to fill those as I play and flesh them out.

Nothing wrong with doing that. Though I'll leave the rest to the Character Mods then.

Can you link things like Iromakuanhe, Astral Commonwealth, somatic tuning (where you mention gene modification), her brother Lucas, etc? Horns are not naturally black, she would have gotten those mod'd too, if you want to include that.

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